Pattern of errors

• Being descriptive: This is the part where I mess up most of the time because I look at the length of essay and make my explanations shorter so I can point out important stuff. This makes my essay less descriptive and short. I also sometimes end my conclusions with a new idea that I don't explain because I want others to think about it. But I guess I should just summarize my essay.

• Grammar mistakes: I made a lot of grammar mistakes during my essay and this makes my essay less effective as a college level essay. So I guess I should start checking my errors twice and read my essay out loud to someone so that can improve my writing papers.

• Confusing points: I also confuse my reader by not explaining my point very well or getting too wordy that makes hard for the reader to understand because one word can have two different meanings.This makes my essay confusing and abrupt as you say and I will try to improve it this time!:)

Free speech off campus must be protected.......

I think they consider this case as a hard case because it's not just a educational issue..It's also a respect issue. From my point of view, people expects respect when they donate their or their loved ones body to any programs and Amanda Tatro violated the obligation to respect the donated body. 

All of the students of those kinds of programs are usually aware of the instructions of respect and dignity in the beginning of the classes. And once she broke the law of the respect and after the university is aware of it, they had to take actions because it's disrespectful. So I think that there isn't an issue on the first amendment or a political issue. It's about the policies of University and the program. Moreover, it doesn't matter if she post it on her facebook wall on campus or off campus because once anything posted on internet, people can access it while they are in university and more students can do the same thing as she did. After reading this over and over, I am agree with the arguments of the university. So University has all the right to discipline for the violation of their policy and Tatro's disrespectful behaviors toward the program. In addition, it also hurts university's reputation from the donor's families's point of views. 

 Peer Review......................

         I think the peer review in the class is kind of effective but not too much. I would suggest you to start grading people's peer review because sometimes the peer doesn't even finish their review..That's what happened with my last one, and I didn't have any clue how to improve my rough draft or paper. otherwise, it's good that I get to know other people's point of view. 

         As a peer reviewer, I am good at finding others mistakes and I am also good at describing my point of view according to their topics. However, I am also bad at finding grammar mistakes. yes, I like to peer review for the earlier stages of writing process so that it's easier for the others to fix their mistakes. I like small groups because it's more fun!!Yes ,I always have appropriate amount of time to peer review for others. :)

My college experience has been good so far. The best class that I enjoyed during my freshman year is FYE: school's out. I enjoyed going on field trip with Dr.Stirling and my friends. It was so much fun and I really miss it this semester. I also enjoyed working on my quiz and homework with math tutors in the library. They are so cool and they makes me laugh every time I visit them. The least thing that I enjoyed during my freshman year is being in my programming class because my friends dropped out and I am the only girl in that class so I have to sit alone!!:( But I guess it's worth it. Overall, I just love being a college student!!<3:)

For this blog post, I chose to analyze the argument about Amanda Tatro and her friends(classmates) who post some comments on her facebook page. I think that the punishment is unfair since according to the criminal investigation, she didn't intent to harm anyone; however, Uni. of Minnesota put charges on her with a failing grade. It is not acceptable because according to amendment I we have right to speech as long as it's not harmful. Uni. of Minnesota argues that it may regulate what students say on social networking websites on their personal time. But I would say she was just giving her opinion on disruption. I would also argue that since she was not a journalist, her way of saying her opinion is probably different or may be in a negative way, but it wasn't intended. If it's her fault in this case, then in the future, there won't be any student who is protected to give his/her right to speech. Usually colleges solve their issues by making students more aware, educate by the topic and providing them counseling instead of punishing students for typing their opinion on social networking websites. And the most important thing is she didn't post the comment on campus so that she didn't waste her uni. time on that post. Therefore, it should harm uni. policies.

University of Minnesota.