During this semester, I learned how to type in an MLA format paper. As the semester comes to an end, if I reflect back on my goals, I kind of achieved what I wanted because my vocabulary has become the stronger and more effective than the beginning of the semester. Moreover, My ideas have been more descriptive and understandable than before.
 I would like to add one more goal that I want to learn to write for the audience. In addition, I would like to more focus on the thesis, trustworthy tone, and audience's attention.

As a writer, I would like to continue to be more focused on my main ideas and build an effective thesis. My weakness is I go off track during typing my essay when It's related to my personal life which is irrelevant. I will try to stick with my topics in future.

 For my portfolio I choose to revise my argument essay.

Strengths: 

1.  Involvement of idffrent point of views
2.  Effective ideas related to the thesis
3.  Effective thesis

Weaknesses:

1. Grammar mistakes
2. Need to be more focused and concise
3. ideas should have been connected to each other to help the reader

To effectively revise my essay, I m going to more focus to smooth my essay by connecting the ideas to each other. I will also make sure that I will related my ideas to the thesis as well. I will read each paragraph out loud so that I can figure out my grammar mistakes. I will also make sure that I won't go off topic or I will my best to not become more broad while writing.

I will also make sure that my ideas wouldn't confuse my audience and I would try to bring my readers or audiences attention to the argument so that they wont question my paper or argument. I will also make sure that my evidence is arguable and related to the thesis and my topic so that I can provide better knowledge of my argument to the reader.

I analyzed the essay named "Free speech off campus should be protected?" In that essay, the writer used a question in the title. I will also used the question to analyze my argument so that I can bring people's attention and let them know what i am going to argue about. This taught me how question can make reader think about the issue more.

In that essay the writer also used the trustworthy tone for her audience so that she can convey audience about her argument. I will try to use the same positive and trustworthy tone to make my audience believe so that they won't have opposing point of view than me.

In the essay that I analyzed, the writer showed the opposing point to show the audience different point of views. In the essay that I am going to argue on bullying I will show the positive and negative effect of bullying show audience the effects of my argument.

Thesis: Even though bullying in high school is one of the most common issues in today's society, it should become a major concern for teens in order to decrease the rate of suicides in teenagers.

My most compelling evidence is an example of a classmate, Jeremy Walzack, who recently committed suicide because there were lots of students use to bully him because of his mental disorders and failures in his classes. No one noticed the symptoms of suicide because his friends thought that he probably had a break up with his girl friend. But, then they found out that he was getting bullied by people who were claiming that he is not cool. It's logical that if you have seen bullying in recent that means it's usual and important to prevent.

My weakest evidence is my claim that if students find out the symptoms of suicides in their friends and classmates then they can tell someone adult or teachers so that they can hire a social adviser to help their friend. So that's why I m arguing that it should become a major concern and teens should take it seriously by helping their friends. Moreover, teens also can understand that bullying is a crime and they can get punish for it as well so that they should bully someone and play with their feelings.

Pattern of errors

• Being descriptive: This is the part where I mess up most of the time because I look at the length of essay and make my explanations shorter so I can point out important stuff. This makes my essay less descriptive and short. I also sometimes end my conclusions with a new idea that I don't explain because I want others to think about it. But I guess I should just summarize my essay.

• Grammar mistakes: I made a lot of grammar mistakes during my essay and this makes my essay less effective as a college level essay. So I guess I should start checking my errors twice and read my essay out loud to someone so that can improve my writing papers.

• Confusing points: I also confuse my reader by not explaining my point very well or getting too wordy that makes hard for the reader to understand because one word can have two different meanings.This makes my essay confusing and abrupt as you say and I will try to improve it this time!:)

Free speech off campus must be protected.......

I think they consider this case as a hard case because it's not just a educational issue..It's also a respect issue. From my point of view, people expects respect when they donate their or their loved ones body to any programs and Amanda Tatro violated the obligation to respect the donated body. 

All of the students of those kinds of programs are usually aware of the instructions of respect and dignity in the beginning of the classes. And once she broke the law of the respect and after the university is aware of it, they had to take actions because it's disrespectful. So I think that there isn't an issue on the first amendment or a political issue. It's about the policies of University and the program. Moreover, it doesn't matter if she post it on her facebook wall on campus or off campus because once anything posted on internet, people can access it while they are in university and more students can do the same thing as she did. After reading this over and over, I am agree with the arguments of the university. So University has all the right to discipline for the violation of their policy and Tatro's disrespectful behaviors toward the program. In addition, it also hurts university's reputation from the donor's families's point of views. 

 Peer Review......................

         I think the peer review in the class is kind of effective but not too much. I would suggest you to start grading people's peer review because sometimes the peer doesn't even finish their review..That's what happened with my last one, and I didn't have any clue how to improve my rough draft or paper. otherwise, it's good that I get to know other people's point of view. 

         As a peer reviewer, I am good at finding others mistakes and I am also good at describing my point of view according to their topics. However, I am also bad at finding grammar mistakes. yes, I like to peer review for the earlier stages of writing process so that it's easier for the others to fix their mistakes. I like small groups because it's more fun!!Yes ,I always have appropriate amount of time to peer review for others. :)