As a look at my first blog post, I do feel like it's improving by time. I kind of feel like I am reaching for my goals  that I made on the first day of the class. Even my essays are getting more descriptive and looks like college essays now. Thank you so much miss Spencer for giving me feed backs on my papers. They were so helpful!


Yeah, this class actually helped me as a writer because now I know how does my ideas show go with the flow of essays which my tutor taught me!!:) (Miss.Young) 


Yes, I feel like the class is kind of quiet and we should do more activities to make it fun. For example, when we went over coma splice and those stuff, we used some sentences for exercises and we all were so eager to find out the mistakes in those sentences.It was so much fun and it actually took all of us intention.


Yes, my writing has been changed a little because now my essays as I said are more descriptive and in MLA format with correction and wordy a little than before, So I guess it's a positive improvement in my writing but hopefully it will become more furnished by the end of the semester. 


On the scale of 1 to 5, I would say my writing has improved 2 to 3 but hopefully I will get better by time!

Purpose: The purpose of writing an analyze essay was to sell improved  iphone ultra product. On the other side, my literacy narrative purpose was improve my English skills. Therefore, both purposes  shows the improvement but in a different way.  


Audience: The audience of my analyze essay were teenagers and businessmen; however, the audience of my literacy essay were the people who moved to United States from different country. 


Genre: Literacy narrative is all about how much I suffered to get into AP classes and get out of ESL. On the other hand, in analyze essay, apple persuaded people to get iphone ultra so that they don't have to  suffer to look for apps which makes iphone more special.


Tone: iphone advertise has a funny an dashing tone; however, my literacy narrative has a serious tone.


Rhetorical situation: Analysis essay is more modern and improved version of an iphone which shows a great personality; however, my literacy narrative essay is about my own life and my hardships that I faced to improve my English.

Purpose: By showing the apps that people usually needs in regular life, this ad was able to persuade that iPhone Ultra 4G, is more easily accessible with the applications with 64 GB capacity with so many new features.
Audience: This style of iPhone is launched for the teenagers and business people which shows coolest personality and organization. The apps shows texting, camera, youtube, calculator, i tunes which everyone needs to enjoy their life.  The shadow of the phone is blurry which indicates that there isn't any phone like iPhone in this world.
Genre: This is one of the best ad from apple which has great blackish grey back ground which makes the phone more bright and its OLED screen makes it look more fashionable. All these arguments states that iPhone really shows a great personality with accessibility of all applications.
Tone: All the apps, black background, apple's logo on the back all create a dashing and fun tone!

 

• My final paper looks much better and descriptive than my rough draft. I corrected most of my errors and it's seems more organized than before. My rough draft had a lot of mistakes since I just put all the steps that I followed to get success; however, the steps weren't descriptive and organized like now. 
• Yes, I did major changes in my paper such as fragments, organization, description, etc. I also changed my grammar mistakes.

• Yes, after peer review and retyping the paper, I realized my mistake that I made during my rough draft. But some errors were just fragments so the power point that we went through in class helped me, too.
• Peer review and rereading my paper caused the changes that I made in my paper. Peer review actually helped me to see my partners' point of view which was kind of different than mine.
• Aspects of my essay: Strongest aspects of my essay was that I mentioned my all the steps that I went through and all the hardships that I faced during my journey from ESL to AP classes.
• My writing Process:

1. Type a rough draft of everything that comes out of your mind according to the subject.
2. Brainstorming on it. and add stuff on rough draft.
3. Check grammar mistakes.
4. Peer Review.
5. Corrections.
6. rereading essay out load to see if it makes sense or not.
7. final draft.

Done!!!:)